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Old 02-22-05, 02:58 PM   #5
~Ku$tUm-Im@gE~
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From: OrlAndO
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mizz fyre....,uve step up ya game nice verse 7/10.....
favorite line
''mothers face in her hands, no news again she's distraught
son starving it seems heaven might be closer than once thought''
nice ending to that line.....i felt ur magazine line was forced....but overall it was nice...

countree jay
6/10 not as good...good vocab at the begging but it feel off at the end....


both: nice i deas and concepts....good collab overall......\/\/ plz return favor
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