First guy sounds kinda like he isnt putting much effort into his delivery, he sounded half asleep.. Or maybe he was trying to be quiet when he recorded?.. Fux you sound aiight.. Multies were nice, you had better flow and delivery.. I think that you both need work on making better music thats more into it as opposed to just writing 2 verses for a track.. I didnt notice any hook or into or out tro..

And you also left a long time on the tape after ur finished rapping.. Which tells me you need a lot of work on your mixing skills.. Play around with the features on cool edit a lot more and learn some producing techniques..

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RIP jono, peace out bboy.
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