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Old 02-25-05, 04:49 AM   #20
Dex
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Voted For: X-CELL

good battle. nice verses from both.

X-Cell: opener was nice. Good metaphor about Bob Marley in a nice punch. Second bar was alrite, good punch, set up was a bit weak tho. Closer was cool, good metaphor, good punch, nice way to end the verse, but a little short. Overall the flow awas good, the structure was a bit funny but the punches on the whole were good.

EyeDEA: opener was ok. To be honest i wasnt totally feelin it. the punch needed to be harder i think. Secondbar was really weak, punch should have been harder. closer was real good, the best bit of ya verse by far! Overall some of your wording could have been done better but it flowed well and the structure was good. Come harder with punches all the way thru next time and you'll do a lot better
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