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Old 02-25-05, 10:24 AM   #33
Sean G.
This is my first post!
 
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Voted For: ~Ku$tUm-Im@gE~

Ok battle.

Marv: If you had proof of his alias then I would say good personals, but he says he isnt, and u have no proof so ya that cancels out the personals. punches were ok, but your attempt at wordplay was bad. a porno line? best line was PMin for votes. work on your wordplay.

KI: Ok verse, but your punches weren't that great. you had more then Marv, and a little bit of personals. you need to work on your personals and metaphors. your structure isnt that great either. overall work on personals and structure.

Overall: Both of you need to work on wordplay and provide more proof for personals, or try more. work on punches and metaphors as well.

v- KI