Definately feeling this one, you both have a nice writing style which go good together in fact. It's easy to read and to follow because you kept the vocab quite simple (certainly not a bad thing because high vocab sometimes kills the content).

In the beginning, I didn't really know what the piece had to do with the title 'cause I guessed it was gonna be another random love drop. Stayed that way until 4 last lines when you finally see the connection with the title. I absolutely love the ending, structure is good for sure. Emotion was there, you guys described everything with such a sense of reality. Progression of story was dope as well

Gotta give you props for this one! Tight piece!

DQ

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