Voted For: ..Lyrical..

I can already tell, your drop will have no punches
Heard you rang the bell, I’m just following hunches
Looka here kid, I don’t mean to shatter your dreams
Your career wasn’t meant to happen like AH teams*
...funny punch , good opener too
Your just an ignorant bitch, who gets on peoples nerves
You can afford wins, your wack name is all you deserve
.....decent dis on him, ok bar
Giving you a loss, in my view I’m glad, but yet your sad
You can’t even ‘son’ someone, even if you became a dad
....nice line a lil played by now though
Said he’s gonna be a rapper, rappin without no damn beats
Thinkin you can spit, but you can’t be heard on the streets
....basic closer decent lines
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mix im not gonna post ya whole shit cuz ya struc is super fucked up
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Like Rimi Martin We walk around tah metal detecters if u really want ya girl u betta pretect her like Fat Joe i Can see the crack in ya nose..
When My 9 hit ya mouth ya head be circlen tha globe I dont go that way So Keep ya Robe on Stay the fuck from round me While u put yo thong on...
Cant u see my Gat IS loaded N ill blast ya ass,Cant u see my rymes are sharp Like fresh Cut Glass...
im the one that put u in tha game,I reversed ya shame I gave u ya fame n fo damn sho Gave u ya name....
...honestly this struc makes it hard to do a break down so ill just say dont quote other rappers, work on ya struc, and elevate a bit

v/lyrical

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