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Old 02-27-05, 05:51 PM   #9
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you need to get better with rhyming ur words u got good content u need to finish each line wit a rhyming word
like this
..............................................sike
..............................................bike
it would flow and sound and da punches would hit a lot harder if u did that....but dis was good tho....keep it up

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