Voted For: Indeph

Limited Edition
your structure was good.. flow was on target.. you didnt have very much internal rhyming at all.. i liked some of the imagery in your verse, but to me, it was like, it lacked a story line.. some of the stuff just seemed kind of random.. which ended up taking away some of the potential imagery as well as emotion.. because at times i didnt know where you were going with your peice.. if you would have provided more details and gone more indepth with what you were saying, your verse would have been mad good..

Indeph
structure is good.. flow is on target.. at first it was hard as hell for me to catch on your to rhyme scheme.. i had to read it twice to get it.. you had some internal rhyming.. your imagery was pretty dope.. you put out a good storyline that i could easily follow, therefore allowing me to interpret it in my mind and imagine what you were saying.. your emotion came out pretty strongly as well..

Overall
both of you had a good structure and a good flow.. Indeph had more internal rhyming.. but what really took it for Indeph was the fact his storyline was easier to understand.. with me being able to follow his storyline better i was able to get more imagery and emotion from his verse.. with that being said.. im going to give this to Indeph for the better overall verse..

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