Voted For: Kesse

BLACK~your verse seemed rather simple, the vocab, and the flow of it, nothing really stood out here, no hate, but you need some elevation with multies and wordplay...and i dont think "santanin" is a word, although, i know what you were trying to say, but good attempt, just need more practice..1
KESSE~pretty decent opener, nice wordplay and link usage, although unneccessary, because you already are using multies and strong vocab in this verse, nice personals on him, i like the "cupboards..merely slim pickens "bar..i got a chuckle,aha, funny closer, i think you toook this battle easily...good job, keep it up.1

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