i thought this was a great poem....i bolded the words i liked the best, if you dont like that i did that, then i will fix it, but i think this is by far one of the best pieces i've read here...you really have the idea, good vocabulary, and you captured some good thoughts and feelings, your structure doesnt bother me since, some of your lines would go otherwise unnoticed if it was jumbled together...keep dropping.1

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