Interesting poem, if i would call it that, more like freeverse, with no immediate concept, but you seem to pull it all together into a nice little piece, you could try to work on some better vocabulary, and lol@ things that make you go hmm, reading that reminded me of that cheesy song fromt he 80's...but seriously, it was pretty decent..keep droppping.1

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