Im goin to peep this before i crash out for the nite............................you need to flow it out more, it sounds not like your readin it,but like you didnt put any emotion into it. the sample was aight and the beat was there, but the sample was longer then your verse. You need some practice, but practice will make you flow a lot better, you probably had this written so when you did it, you just did it without feeling the beat. imagine freestyling to a beat. when you freestyle you just roll, dont care what you say next, you just flow, you need to do that...............I listened to it again............and I think the same thing. I give you a C, but thats average and you can get better some of the other guys might be able to point out what im trying to say in a better way, peace

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