Hells Fire
Aight your point of this verse is not that original. I knew someone would do this and write a verse about death. Your imagery was aight, but I didn't feel that connected to the person. You just kept repeating yourself over, and over, and over. Flow was off a little too. I think that you had a decent idea, but you failed to give out what it truly could have produced. Structure made it hard to read too.

What you did right: Your emotion was good, and I was interested enough to see how it would end. Wasn't sure what was going on till the end.

Drama Queen
Wow, usually your stuff is a bit more complex then this was. The rhymes were rather basic in my opinion, and I think that you could have done a lot better then what the verse was.

With that said the many things you did well: Emotion was nice, and I could relate well to your verse. Structure was fine like always, and overall your vocab was a nice blend. The end could have been a bit more impactful with "At the end of my road", but thats just me.

Anxiety
Dude, I am almost crying by reading your verse. It gives me shivers. This is without a doubt the best topical verse I have ever read from you or anyone else. Your emotion was there like nothing else, and just wow. Um, really I cannot find anything bad about this verse, except I wish it was longer. Haha

Structure was good, vocab was lacking, but it wasn't needed. Your storyline was perfect, and your twist on it made it just that more better. I honestly have to say I found nothing wrong with this piece.

v/Anxiety

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