Voted For: MaRVJay1009
Wicked Ones Verse
Only real thing you have is hair, and even that is fallin off...
You're lyrics are one point only when you're suckin off...
^ Punch aight could be worded better though
Don't take me lightly like an overdose, leave you with a broken nose...
U spit with bittin' rhymes and stolen flows and I steal ya shows...
^ Rhyming nice however the "diss" went off a bit near the end
I'm platinum rippin' golden foes you can't match my skill or wit...
^ No connection whatsoever
I'll rip your shit, you're just a bitch, you're whole shit sounds the same...
& I've been writtin' lyrics before you made that account name...
^ no punch really insults could be much better
Internet Mc i'll damage your brain until your heads empty...
^ again no connection with verse rhyme scheme
Why such a short rhyme didn't have enough bittin' lines...
That's a hip-hop crime i'll reach the top and shine...
^ filler i mean unless i missed something you need proof of biting
My flow is a demon, pure evil and you're rhymes are petty stealin...
When I'm creepin' and everybody sleepin' I take a peep in...
^ kinda self-g there not really effective as a punch
Put a pillow over your face to stop the screamin' put the mic to your temple...
& let the whole world know this wasn't a battle I was just makin' an example...
^ Nice closer there best bar perhaps
MaRVJay1009's Verse
u wrong sayin u da sickest son,i know how da use a clip & gun
if he keep talkin shit ima put "TWO" in dis nigga "wicked-ONE"..
^ Gangsta rap is meh but good wordplay though
cant fukk jay dis brotha 2 sick,u gay dont say u luv a new chick
u like a "prostitute in iraq" in how u b "suckin TR.OO.P's dick"...
^ lol wordplay again punch started meh but finished good
fukk sm ya just a weak crew..i heard they dont even need u
i could tell by ya record ur favorite letta's on da alphabet r D.Q
^ good punch liked this lol metaphor used good
every battle my flows change,u cant do dat? ur so lame.....
and da funny thing is u neva had a song on ya OLD NaME....
^ Personal but wasn't as strong as previous bars
MiXTaPE....nobody think ya shits great so now u upset....
ur not "SUPERiOR" i just thinkin u b usin 2 much "METH".....lol
^ good flow steady diss good bar
u sad..eitehr doin open mic or battlin regardless ya suck.........
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Originally Posted by Wicked One
i think i was dropped to much as a baby...
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no wonder y u retarded as fukk
Dope closer i personally like quotes i don't see how they are played if used correctly they are effective...and this was good nice personal too
Overall
WickedOne i was dissapointed...ya verse was good in a rhyming sense and flow/structure but it lacked the neccessity of a battle verse you sacrificed punches for rhyming and you need to learn how to balance the 2.
Marv i liked this verse some effective punches a couple of personals a few bits of wordplay thrown in there...all in all...easy win i'd say.
V/MarvJay1009...RTF on my sig within 3 days or i remove this vote (Gotta make sure RTF's stand)