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Old 03-05-05, 02:41 PM   #10
M&rk
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Voted For: Prophysics

nothin hard at all but you had punches unlike metaman, but that first bar coulda hit hard if you worded it better.
and when you write your verse write in bars, two lines that rhyme not 3. decent from you prophysics since it was just a basic freestyle.

meta-
you servin me could only happen at dinner,
^^^your only attempt at wordplay in the battle and its wicked played. so put more wordplay into punches in your battles and dont come so played. fix that structure try makin each line close to the same length.
wordplay and structure to no wordplay or structure.
pro wins.

return the favor wit... battle link in sig
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