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Old 03-06-05, 02:07 AM   #10
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From: Adanac
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Voted For: ~High-Dro~

pretty easy battle here....heres how i see it

voc...you gotta come harder man, and your rhyme scheme wasnt too great...opener didnt really rhyme therefore it wasnt really effective....you gotta elevate alot, but your not looking that bad, had some nice attempts at personals...have the right idea, you just have to up flow and wordplay and that will make them hit harder, but overall, hy dro came alot stronger and had better punches

hy dro....didnt like the opener, coulda been worded better, need to up vocab and structure, cause at some places it needed alot of work....last bar was really chopppy, but you have the right idea with this battling shit, you have some nice creativity.....so keep eleavting man....word

v/hydro, better punches, wordplay, personals
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