I need to find a escape from this place
feel loved and needed held tight in someone’s embrace
the love I once felt for another
died when I lost them
as I held my baby in my arms
felt new you no. The proud mum
^Loving this part

Strongest aspect of your piece is the emotion, so pure and raw, like you spit it straight from the core based on own life experience. You picture it with such a sense of reality that it's easy for people to relate to. Found a good balance with your vocab, not too basic but not too complex either. Your structure creates a bit of confusion which I liked in fact. Keep on dropping girl and please return the favor on one of my poems. Thanks! Europe represents

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