Emotion was raw and very strong in this poem, like the concept you went with. Don't really mind your structure, creates a bit of confusion and forces the readers to really focus on what you're saying.

its hard to speak...

for yourself when you only speak what is heard
^liking these...

You make your readers think about some stuff which is someting I am definately feeling. Vocab was good as well, not too basic but not too complex either. Good job!

DQ

__________________