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Old 03-06-05, 04:50 PM   #21
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From: Adanac
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it was okay........i thought some lines could been worded better, but it worked nicely.......miss' definately had the better verse, no hate to oreo, just think your structure was a little lacking, oreo you had nice vocab in there, made it worth reading....and miss, you seem like you had a couple stretched/forced lines......but, it was a decent drop, keep up
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