Hmm...this wasn't that great. Considering you admitted to feeding a line off of the movie 8 Mile but Im'a still drop some feedback anyway.

I did like a few lines in there but this wasn't that good of a diss. You needed to add some harder hitting punches and metaphores than straight and basic concepts. My favorite bar was...

Blaze ride dicks, bull shit is what he spits.
White shit in his mouth and it aint Miracle Whip.

Lol..that shit made me laugh. It was alright but nothing special becuse there was no real punch in there. I'd say you needed to add more punches to this piece to make it a more effective diss. This wasn't taht bad but it wasn't great. But stay up and elevate.