Voted For: Cass'

ok this was a better battle from murdz, but weak in general, both could have done alot better
structure was fucked up work on that before anything
then work on your puches and metaphores, both of you could eleavte a bunch then battle again should be a good battle fi you both eleavte alot...

but since you had better structure then i give you this won

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