Thread: Being real
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Old 03-09-05, 01:26 PM   #4
Germ
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word, not bad man, alot of the rhymes seemed forced, and some lines were stretched, so basically all you gotta do is tune up on your structure and flow, but that was pretty tight, had nice complexity, wasnt boring, oh, and your wordplay and vocab can upped a little too, but not bad, it was pretty good
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