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Old 03-10-05, 07:35 PM   #33
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Voted For: Hot Sauce

hot yo ya verse was good but u need to fucking fix ya structure that shit made it hard as hell to read but i did read some good punches that hit hard i thought ya switch up was when u turned it up a notch and really did ya thang ya hit connected ya flow was good but ya stru was choppy as fuck

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^^ good hit

nightfall u are new to rapverse and u is preety ill prop cuz u had some good hit a way better structure but ya punches wasnt as raw as hot but they was there and connected none was a knockout blow thou ya flow was good but i think punches win battles and that is what u need it more of here

your shit looks like its been written by a child....
somone needs to spice u up cuz this hot suace is mild...
good flow but u need wasy better punches