Voted For: Op!n!on

here's how i see it

natural....you came out with a nice opener, but then the next few bars you kinda weakened up, just mainly stating some random statements that didnt really diss him, your structure was messed to shit, and that took away from the flow flowing and the effectiveness of your attempted punches/personals....it was really hard to follow at times because your structure was bad....so, overall, you didnt come as hard, which made your punches/personals weak as hell, and your structure and flow were really bad....so work on that mainly, but you did have nice creativity and wordplay

opinion....not a bad battle for your first, haha, your had nice personals in there, some that hit really hard, like the opener and the closer, good shit right there....weakest line was the 3rd bar, i thought the wordplay used was a little crappy, thought it coulda been better to make it more effective....but overall, i think you stayed more consistant with dissing, and your personals/punches hit harder...you had very nice structure which helped....so, thats why your getting the vote....but you need to up your vocab, i think, thats really all, but it didnt affect your verse too much....word, keep up yo

v/opinion

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