this wasn't too bad, your close, but I wasn't really feeling the delivery, u didn't put much energy into it, lyrics were pretty decent u had a nice rhyme scheme through most of it, just sounds like your uncomfortable on the mic, the volume goes up alot from the first verse to the second, it sounds like your delivery improves a little bit too, just think it would have been better if the energy was there the whole time... keep droppin and postin all that feedback..1

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