thats fuckin ILL man, some of the lines rhymes seemed forced tho like this line:
Now I See It Clear, How Much I Really Loved You, And Cared
^^forced rhyme, try giving it room for the emotion like 5 words or so, and make sure the syllable count is equal and you would be on my level fo sho, the imagery was very nice you got me into writing tonight so im gonna get at it, ight
keep doin ya thang and take my advice i jsut got that same advice form wet willy last night

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