Voted For: Evolution

aight this is easy....heres how it see it

jwill.....elevate is the key word here....gotta work on everything man, from punches to structure, whole works, but everything wasnt bad, vocab was nice.....you seem to be on the right track with battling, but you need some more elevatin, read the tutorials or sump...like, make your verse structured to benefit the voters, dont want to make a paragraph looking thing thats hard to read, cause it will take away from your punches and personals....word, so, keep elevatin, not bad for starting off, but you need some work

evolution....giving you this because you had good structure/flow and your punches were aight....not bad, some were played, some were stupid, like your opener, you rhymed the exact same thing, no, bad line, haha, sorry, no hate, but not really a punch if your using the same words.....but you had some nice lines in there, vocab and wordplay were decent, your on the right track too, keep elevating and you'll be fine......oh, and you seemed like you had a few stretched lines, butthat will come in time, keep up man

v/evolution.....and word, dont be cheap, RTF in one of the links in my sig, either OSB or chowie chow, its appreciated...word

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