yeah, agreeing totallly with (lovely) dq here, the emotion was powerfull man, imagery was bouncing all over the place when i was reading, haha, yeah, but, i could feel it man, you did a real good job of having ^ balance in your vocab, cause alot of time, some people can over-vocab (how i feel anyways), or not use enough vocab, but you had a nice equilibrium in there, so that was good, it flowed nicely too, this was a great piece, keep up man....

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