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Old 03-14-05, 03:04 PM   #29
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From: Adanac
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Voted For: Untraceable

yeah, here's what i see

hot sauce, not a bad drop, had the multies in there, which is good, but you didnt have to use them all the way through, cause some shit was weak and seemed like fillers....and, yeah, alot of your mutlies come off as weak, because you use them so much, that some aren't as good as others, so i suggest, not using them everywhere, plus, your structure wasn't all that great, in parts i had a tough time following it....but not a bad drop, didnt think you really had that many personals, most were punches that were either played or weak, so, you need to work on that....but you had nice vocab and wordplay, especially in the second verse, but i just dont think you came that hard

untraceable.....flow and structure, nothing wrong at all with those....vocab, nothing special, wordplay, decent.....had good creativity playin off his name, complexity, nothing special....what separated you two, i think, was your consistency dissin your opponent, not all your punches/personals were hard, but you had them coming every line, which is good, and you had a few nice ones in there, like the "everyone run" line, haha, i laughed...so overall, i thought you came harder, had effective punches....personals owned him, (made a big difference), and thats why your getting my vote

v/untraceable....wordizzle
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