Voted For: OneStepBeyond

close battle, heres what i see

IGGY
>My words lethal like aids, to them u won't find a CURE
My punches hit u harder than 50 to Jada in "THE MASSACRE
-nah, wasnt feelin it....4/10
>I'll strip~your~skin, pick~up the~win, while commiting only one SIN
take ur prewritten verse but to where you found it, in the recycling BIN
-not a bad line, second coulda been worded better 7/10
>You'll never see the SIGN, all you see are lyrics that RHYME
me ripping your brain is the only way, u be expanding your MIND
-played, plus first line was dumb 4/10
>Dawg, ur still on the ground, i'm in the ABYSS
I'm hitting your balls from side to side like we playing TENNIS
haha, this line made me laugh 7/10
>what kind of name is Onestepbeyond
u'll be one step beyond life cuz 6 feet underground is where u'll be found.
-uh, horrible structure, weak too 2/10

overall: 24/50.........not a bad verse man, some lines seemed like fillers though and that you didnt really try, some lines were hot, but set up lines and wordplay killed them....you got some skills, just need to elevate on structure, vocab, and wordplay, i think, cause you got the right idea with punches man, keep up

OSB
>Wanna buck up? hahahahaha.. Try it and one day you bastards lay,
this faggots comin at me 'weak' as fuck, like sunday to saturday,*
-this line i laughed, nice opener man, good shit 9/10
>So how you gonna beat me, you can't so just hold me back bitch,
Or you'll get wrapped up in plastic, like a bologno sandwich,
-meh, 2nd line was weak....5/10
>This is like my fourth or fifth post, bitch im sure your scared,
Me not sick is like seein M. Jackson, and sayin theres no perverts there,
-jacksons lines are played, but this one made me laugh, 7/10
>On the bottle it said take two, but instead I took fifty,
Thats why I don't need no vibrater to have you 'shook quickly',
-meh, decent 6/10
>Look Iggy, you can hate me, but if you ever try to touch my shit,
I'll stomp ya face flat with timbs and start yellin "suck my dick!"
what? 4/10
>Then i'll fuckin eat it for breakfast and pretend its a pancake,
You can't rap for shit, and im not syain that cuz you match a bandaid..
-coulda been better, and what are you eating? 5/10

overall: 36/60...........not bad, pretty weird in places, weak too, but i think that the punches that landed, hit alot harder than any of iggy's, so thats why your gettin my vote, for harder punches/personals, plus, i think you had better structure, flowed alot nicer as well....work on gettin multies, and up vocab and wordplay...wordizzle, keep up yo........plus, opener was best line in the battle from either of you, good shit

v/onestepbeyond........rtf if you could be so kind

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