this was not really a good piece u need serious elevation but u can get betta not hating just sum friendly advice...structure was off...voacb needs elevation...work on ur wordplay...& keep writing & eventually u'll get 2 ur potential fo sho it was 5/10
make sure 2 return the favor in my battle: both lyrics were weak but i thought mine was betta
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