*listening*
Dooms.....you seem pretty blah in this one. Your dubs didn't really match well either. They were in the right place, they just seemed wierd. I think you needed to use less of them.
Triple......your flow was tight, it just seemed like it was to a different beat.
Chorus.....it seemed like it was being read instead of spit....just emotionless.
Overall, this track has lots of potential, it just seems like something that was rushed. I think if you sat down and redid it, it would be like ten times better
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