Okay, concept isn't original but to be honest, any girl would like a guy to write stuff like this for her so whoever was on your mind, she one lucky girl...

I feel you both came equally good on this one, had a lot of strong and pure emotion in there and the way you worded it was nice as well. It wasn't too mushy in fact, you had some imagery in there but strongest was emotion, no doubt about that.

The chorus was good, I liked it and the seperate verse were real good as well. Kept me focussed throughout the whole piece which is an accomplishment already hehe...It's nothing too original maybe but you can see it's the real stuff and I just love reading that

Keep it up!

DQ

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