I personally don't liek this beat.

You're maxing the recording level of your set-up and it manifests as "clipping" which sounds absolutely ear-piercing. Turn down the recording vol of your mic, or speak quieter into it. You're on the reverb WAY too much. It should be far more slight. Put a soc on the mic because it pops pretty frequently.

The rhymescheme was nice. The flow was a bit off tempo in some places (I can cite the lines if you want) by like one or two syls which pushed it over and under. Seems to have been corrected in the second verse, but the quality is still bad and borderline annoying. I liked the hook, real nice scheme to it. I feel if you trimmed those lines in the first verse a syl or two and adress the quality issues - you'll have what you were aiming for. 1

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