Voted For: Drama Queen

Parallel- your verse was pretty basic, your rhymes were very basic, the story was sad...your vocab wasn't very good, a lot of words were used repetitively...also, you rhymed visited with visited...the story was deep, but ur verse wasn't, it just scratched the surface of what it could have been...you gotta put more detail into it...but RIP to ur grandma, keep doin it

Drama Queen- urs flowed REAL nice...your vocab was really good...i like how u didn't just stick to the literal meaning of death...u talked about the death of your innocence...every line was strong...honestly, that verse was beautiful...really good job...probably the best material i have seen on this site...good job

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