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I walk & walk over you
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IP:
Imagination- Ok shit was good with the imagination, i could picture in my mind what the girl is going through, nice shit.
Emotion- Upp your emotion a little, overall it was good, and i could feel the narrator personal feelings ya know?
Vocab- Good word choosing, and using them correctly.
overall- this a good piece, good job
(PS. WHEN WE GOING TO DO A OPEN MIC?)
o and leave feedback in my Latest om, " a day of my life"
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.:* Crhyme Sindicate* :.
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