not bad for a first time om.....but the thing is you shoulda stated this was a freestyle cuz then youll get ppl like hood_dawg not realizing that is really what it was.....there wasnt an actual topic to it....thats what a freestyle is...lol.....good flow good vocab and decent structure could be a lil more even but keep it up and i hope ppl dont sleep on this cuz its your first....ppl need encouragement to keep doin them so feed will help

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