Voted For: intensify effect

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this verse was good, vocab was nice good choise of words vision was there, felt what u was saying u had a few celever lines and got the point across nicely good tight verse


Seven angels burning as they fall,simply unspoken
Thier harps silent and unused,simply just broken
Heavens ingulfed in flames,holy churches tumbling down
As The Throne of god Is usurped by death's crown
No such thing as judgment day,its now been denied
All unworthy of the dark shall perish,its impossible to hide
Desolate eyes ascend In hate,all evil starts to show
the white light is now black,and the red starts to glow
Humans falling into the depths below,no reason to fight
Shadowed by dark clouds,no rememberance of light
As people start to bask and glorify the heat of hell
We turn into weeping mortals that will forever dwell
Our souls shall never rest,but be forever serving the devil
endliss torment awaits,death seems paused never to prevail
as demons rip into your flesh,to expose your inner self
you relise you should of praised god,and he would of delivered your wealth

shit was tight 8/10

intensify effect
ya verse was good, i thought u had more celever lines
ya vocab was good, vision was there the emtion of fire was there i thought this was a hot verse man ya 2 was went at this good then i notice intensify say D pre-write this which is lame and if it tookhim 1 hour thats tight

eternal damnation

Pain inflicted through emotions given...
Soul is positioned to scream though my throat is missin *wah*...
Envision a mind vs a talent.. in a voice box entrenched in a vine...
Then u will find a dilemma just as simple as mine...
insight like a blind monk, word patterns wanderin' the mountainsides...
cuz with all my reason and truth, even i lose my footing at times..
I suffer cuz I favor verbs and fatal words...
But vocally my cords are stressed more than laid off laborers...
wont stop till im niled-to-da-curv, feels like hitler soul grabb'in-me...
rapedly making ya dicks drop to the floor like u was being SUCKED by gravity...
u would think guns, knifes and accidents causes casualties...
but these forces beyond what we all have been practicing...
witch craft, voo-doo, with bones gift-raped... what a tragedy...
pop'ed opticals for trash reading of ya topicals..slugs u had to see..
BITCH!,
claps when i strut through the door gashes bust through my pores...
The Face of Durban Slapped to the Cutting room Floor...
coward is taimed, but my enternal feelings are killing me...
skin peeling from the sins in me frightning lighning reeling on agility...
on the heels of achilles as my pride bested my think modes...
i can conquer all of rap N still wont think smooth...
till aint no-one left to be next to lose, i feel there still complication...
and this my 1st topical drop, imagen what i have instored befor my enternal damnation......... BITCH...

i was feeling the ending shit was all around tight

9/10