Voted For: One M.B.

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OMB:

Amazing verse, i didnt know you had topical skill like that. You made it so complex yet simple, which is a hard thing to do but it makes the perfect topical piece. Your vocabulary definately won you this battle, not to mention the strong emphasis on wordplay and multies and the emotion was good. A couple good lines of imagery tied this whole piece together..

Overall: 9.5/10

Effect:

Not to make you seem like a bad topical writer, But you came a little too basic and a little too obvious for me. I mean within the first 8 lines i knew exactly where your story was going. You cant make a topical piecve be that way, you gotta have the element of suprise and imagination. Dont do what everyone else does be original, and your piece was far from that. Vocab was decent could have been better, your imagery was a bit better than OMB. Emotion i thought would be the deciding factor but you slipped off of it and went on a totally different level. You got back into the emotin but it wasnt enough. Your creativity lacked.

Vote: OMB

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