yo you was ok but you need to work more on punches, you also got to work alot on your personals i see you played off his name but you could have used different personals, that name shit got boring, but your strucutre was OK, you just need to work on using personals and metaphores and punches all in the same verse, and try harder to beat your chalenger so that you know that you win, but you also need to calm down on your self glorification, it was like everyother line would be slefglorification

Heat, your structure was real wack and your punches where not hitting, if you woudl have prewrittent his then you might have one, just eleavte in every area, sorry but thats all i can say