Voted For: One M.B.

aight....this was an okay battle

effect...i thought you came out with the typical path concerning this topic....wasn't really feeling your verse much either, i feel you strayed alot, going from thought to thought, which made it less involving to read....however, your emotion was pure and probly the best aspect of your piece, i could really feel this "soul" had been through struggles...but i also felt you could have described it better with more vocab and wordplay...overall, your verse was good, but predictable and basic....no twist or anything, just an average piece

"thats not giving me a reason really to live here anymore
im lost and can never be found don't know whats in store
analizing about things that are just about to happen
theres no place for me to hide everything is trapping
rapping is my therapy why are all my friends my enemys
I feel so hopeless you've drained all away my energy"

^probs my fav part of your piece

OMB...nice drop, the middle, i felt was the weakest part because your opening and your closing parts were just so raw with thought and emotion/imagination, i was really feeling it too, especially towards the end of it because you picked your words very nicely and it all wrapped up nicely....i feel your imagery is what you need to work on the most....i think that at point you are using to much vocab and it strains the overall potential of your piece....but i still feel this was a very well put together piece, good idea, great emotion....great closing, very true and easy to relate to.......and one more thing, it was kinda hard at times to interpret some lines 'cause of spellin errors and what not, certain wordplay...but thats not hard to fix, you probly typed this out really fast...wordizzle

"My soul's a small chemical reaction lost in my brain
My movement's restricted from the frost of my veins
Ambition obliterates small steps to my dreams
Cognition incenerates my pleas to be free"

^wooo, these lines kicked

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