This was pretty decent, you dont have to use those~ to separate your words, because then it seems like your trying too hard to rhyme in a particular scheme, poetry is like a free write, where you can just write what your thoughts are or what your feeling without having to overpower it with rhymes, i like your words, but back them with power...keep dropping..1

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