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Old 03-23-05, 07:15 PM   #15
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Voted For: Orion.

this wasnt difficult.

Firstly Hot Sauce your structure was out of sync to wat im used to so i had to decipher the verse before i could read it. Ya flow was alrite, would have been better if it was easier to read and the lines wasnt as stretched. ur opener was ok, a good punch but stretched and not hitting as hard. Closer was ok again but not much more i wasnt feeling it at all. Overall you had a lot of quite good punches, with some mtaphors packed in too.

Orion: your verse was a lot more wat i am used to so easier to read and very entertaining. Opener was ok, nice punch hit quite hard. Closer was real good., Was really feeling this. nice metaphor, hit hard. Overall ya punches were good, no real personals but neither did he. Good metaphor uses which made a clever verse.