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Voted For: MaRVJay1009
marvjay took this joint. basically, his punches made more sense even though i had trouble readin this drop a lil. there sumthin as a lil too much slang nah mean. but neway, i was feelin marv's flow more and his verse was wittier.
quit rappin fam when its cum da text-u-gay,& i aint gon kill u newphew j
shit ima just wait till ya 'sista gift birth 2 her son' then kill ya "newphew j"
^ok personal coulda been set up better
eva way even her daughter could die..its real ez im torchin dis guy
dis fag j known da take "L'S" look at his rec. his losses r "HiGH"
^solid bar
show me a bar datz sick,u post...fam betta keep dat pis-tol close
1nce i pull dat clipp u ghost..dis aint even fair i should let his crew vote
^good bar, nice diss
beside's a "mouse" he aint gota "click"...look ur weak im hotta bitch
u hold guns? a "piece of blunt he saved" da only time he gota "clip"
^not feelin this as a diss(that rhymed, im just sick like that) but neway, i didnt think this one hit that hard
u should of know dont go at jay he's a vet,i'll merk u with my weakest text...
i'll heat-ya-flesh if i squeeze-a-tech ya breathin left...homie u meetin-death
^ight bar nothin special, good use of multies tho
close casket...no face no arms only thing there is ya knee's n chest
ya bar's is like "air ballz" fam they shouldn't even "reach da NET"
^good punch, nice flow
aint gota write 4 u quer,u need bar's maybe i should write 4 u quer
your sad 4 real how 4-11 and been on dis site 4 2 years??
^wasnt feelin this very much, ok closer tho
nephew j
Dig it-nig,I eat ya like a fig ya think ya big, but I'ma split ya wig/
Ya a frail twig match up to my MiG, crunkjuice take a swig
um, didnt make much sense really
Ya deam a team, think ya mean cause from tha NY Queens/
No rhyme scheme on a fat hoe an' ya avoid tha scene
^still not making much sense but nice multies
MaRV, check this, ya starvin J for some real hit ill shit/
Carve ya tombstone, remember tha crunkjuice dont spill i
^why do u keep talking about crunk juice?
You write at a five year old level, garb a shovel- elevate/
Right now ya demostrate weakness that's very concentrate
^ok bar nothin special
Lemme call ya 'fukkin moms', I'ma stab my dick up in her/
2nd thoughs not, she incestly gave you AIDS, I'll find cleaner
^wack, started rambling here
Is it 1009 faggots you passed them AIDS to? It's true/
Gay societies clue not to fuck wit you, think it throug
^umm no u not really coherent here dog
Crunkjuic is what ya need cause ya shit's wack an' weak/
We already knew ya shit was white an' black an' bleek
^u really like some crunk juice dont u?
MaRV, really, ya not ill on tha real, that's tha deal bitch/
Come a queen early, fo' real, wit stiches ya left in tha ditch//8
^nahh weak closer, good multies tho
overall marvjay got this one punches better and verse flowed and nice multies. all nephew j had were multies but most didnt make sense. keep workin on ya flow.
hit me back. links int he sig
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