Voted For: RetroBution

iight battle yall
heres my feedback

retrobution
IP:


goin against ya peers..this battles gonna turn to tears
listening to obie trice..is the only time u heard "cheers"
ya names dazzle?..ya rhymes hardly set thing to shine
you couldnt "blow up" in this game..if u were a land mine.
ya gon be dissapointed..youll never elevate to be a vet
you cudnt throw up sick lyrics..if u threw up the alphabet
ive seen your battles..and not one punch of note to hit..
verses like the wrong jigsaw piece..they simply a "misfit"
fuck it i dnt need a fith bar..your already in the slammer
i think ya spits r usefull,lol,right..as much as a glasshammer

lotz of punches at opponent
like ur word choice and personals
good structure
elevate sum more
7/10

dazzle
Steppin up to me, yea you just breached this peace,
Ya lines r more played....than a "figure of speech!
Ima deliver your "RetroBution", this is my way to "pay back"
Your style is "Retro"..........so its "a thing of the past"!
150 RV dollars on hand,a large amount?Well i demand a recount,
How he gonna carry that shit, when he Dont own a bank account!
You got no love do you, so jus gimme this win, nobody likes you...
How do i know? Look at your Introduction thread....It only got one view!!

not 2 many punches or personals
work on structure a lil bit so itz easier 2 read
elevate sum more and youll b iight
ur gettn better dazzle much betta 4rm wut u posted in our battle
6.5/10

my v/retrobution 4 more punches and personals at opponent

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