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Old 03-29-05, 01:18 PM   #13
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Voted For: Kid*Kapone

aight...mastermind....where do i start.....your verse was long, but it lacked dissing.....alot of your stuff just kinda randomly stated things, or was very weak...you had one decent punch, but you fucked it up with wording, that nick cannon line, that was creative and shit, but horrible wording maybe it pretty crappy....and scareface comparisons are gettin old and played.....plus, i think your structure wasnt consistent, it flow aight in some places...i think you really need to work on wordplay, making lines more efficient, fixing them up a little so they are better to read and more direct to the opponent......and self glorifying, you did that quite a bit which = , that was a real turnoff........so, this was not that great of a verse

kid....im giving you this because you had some effective punches...opener wasn't that bad, i think i've seen the concept before, but it was still pretty good...and you also attempted more punches, which was good, thats what you gotta do, every line,,,,,,,,,,diss.....but basically you won this because of throwing punches and personals, and landing some.......aside from that, structure was bad, do not stretch your lines, alot of shit seemed forced and didn't flow smoothly.....work on wordplay and vocab, that can always be up,,,,,,,,,and dont put fuckin dots everywhere, it looks stupid.....hard to follow at times......yeah, but you got this battle

v/kid*kapone
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