This poem was decent, it reminds me of my memoirs poem i just dropped last night, it seemed some of your words didnt fit well together,like you just thru any words together to see if they meshed, like the ending paragraph.....i see what you tried to do,but it just looks jumbled and doesnt flow well, as i read..some words dont even make sense, but its ok, with practice,you'll be better..but overall, this was decent..keep dropping..1

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