yes....not a rap, but more poetry-ish, but still, it was good, you got a nice hold on vocab, but you dont over-do it either, you use it effectively and really brings out great imagery and emotion, and thats what you want.....yeah, lines were a little long, but thats because you're probly accustomed to writing in non-rap form......still a good piece, and ya seem like a talented writer.........and you should come to the establishment, not TC, hahaha, word, keep up man

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