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Old 03-29-05, 09:38 PM   #31
fluidmoon
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Voted For: .Wicked One.

intensify effect~ok opener, it could have been worded better,i didnt like the jenna jameson line,it was like you were sayin wicked one was untouchable, thats the way it looks, but i see where you were trying to go here with that concept,some of your lines were stretched as well, but its ok,you're last 2 bars were the best punches you had, i didnt see any real personals here either,this overall was ok form you,i've seen better from you before, but overall not bad..1
wicked one~good opener,this set the tone of the battle nicelyyour vocabulary was overall creative here and structure was good, i liked the line"when its like aids laid down and had a child with herpes".lol, nice wordplay with howard stern name,and nice vince carter line, you had some decent personals, and your closer was good, not that strong,but ok, overall, i think you had the better verse here,it was well put together and the vocab was prominent, good job..1
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