Voted For: final

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good stcutre and the flow was good nice syllable count your vocabulary was very very good. but your imagery i didnt really read a story. you just babled about shit with big vocabulary. and using all the vocab kinda dropped the flow a bit. the worst part was the imagery it just lacked a bit. work on doing sotry's maybe about someone goin through death and your having the stuggle having to go through it with them. it hurts them it hurts all around them. ya know. peace

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well something i noticed that you had better is that you kind of had a story to yours not quite much more but you had a bit better imagery. i still feel as if you need to work on your story's but i know you might think that yours is that toher type of topical but stories are better. the vocabulary was good. the emotion was alot better. peace

RTF in my topical battle with oreo links in the sig peace